Wednesday, October 17, 2012
RA Reflection
I believe that my paper deserves somewhere in the A- or B+ range. It is not quite an A because i struggle with repetition and i do not use ethos logos and pathos as much as i should have. But it is better than a B because i have a very focused and clear essay. If i could do my paper over again, i would have used more outside examples. Maybe related it to other sources to get more credibility. I also would have put more of my voice in the paper, instead of the somewhat weak voice that i have. I would have also tried harder not to repeat myself as much, and analyzed just one step deeper. I didn't do as good because i had a few repeats throughout the essay. Some things i did really well on was keeping the paper focused and tight.e i had a few repeats throughout the essay.
Monday, October 8, 2012
Obama vs. Romney- Rhetorical Strategies
1. Obama begs the question when he completely avoids the question and starts talking about something else.
2.Obama uses juxtaposition when he brings education in at a random time to make his argument seem better.
3. Obama uses accumulation as he twists Romney's argument into sounding bad.
4. Obama uses the same hand gestures the whole debate, he puts his hands in a square shape to describe everything.
5. Obama uses allusion in ways including bringing up Clinton and other examples.
6.Romney has an organized list which is called an enumerate.
7. Romney compares obama to his lying young sons.
8. Romney uses logic by basing his argument in the constitution and the declaration of independence.
9. Romney backs up his arguments with a successful example of Massachusetts which is called an exemplum.
10. Romney uses allusion when he talks about compromise like when the founding fathers came together and used compromise to create this country.
2.Obama uses juxtaposition when he brings education in at a random time to make his argument seem better.
3. Obama uses accumulation as he twists Romney's argument into sounding bad.
4. Obama uses the same hand gestures the whole debate, he puts his hands in a square shape to describe everything.
5. Obama uses allusion in ways including bringing up Clinton and other examples.
6.Romney has an organized list which is called an enumerate.
7. Romney compares obama to his lying young sons.
8. Romney uses logic by basing his argument in the constitution and the declaration of independence.
9. Romney backs up his arguments with a successful example of Massachusetts which is called an exemplum.
10. Romney uses allusion when he talks about compromise like when the founding fathers came together and used compromise to create this country.
Thursday, September 27, 2012
Globalization
The article i picked was 3-A "Behind the 'illegal alien' label, real kids with a lot to contribute. It was written by Marcos Brenton to the Sacramento Bee. Marcos Brenton is a writer for the Sacramento Bee, a news paper in Sacramento California. He writes about baseball. He has written a book about Latinos and baseball. Because of his writing experience his article was very interesting, it kept me captivated throughout the whole thing. He has a lot of knowledge on illegal aliens as he as studied them through baseball and other things. The audience is readers of the sacramento bee. Most of these people live in california. He writes about different parts of california and mentions the state a few times. It was definitely a relevant topic in california. California has one of the highest immigration numbers in the country. This articles purpose is to inform and change the readers opinion about "illegal aliens".
The main strategy he uses is outside sources. He quotes a lot of other articles, then expounds on them to make them fit his argument. He has many stories and examples to build his argument. He has excellent transitions between these quotes. The paper flows, it drags you in and you cant stop reading.
I feel like this paper is very effective. I am not the biggest fan of immigration and "illegal aliens" but this was still a very interesting article to me. With his using quotes and other outside sources he brings a great balance of rhetoric to his argument. The quoted articles bring logic to his paper. They also make him more credible because he is quoting credible sources. These articles also bring the power of Pathos to his article. The quotes are very emotion grabbing and make you feel what "illegal aliens" feel. Overall this was a very persuasive article.
The main strategy he uses is outside sources. He quotes a lot of other articles, then expounds on them to make them fit his argument. He has many stories and examples to build his argument. He has excellent transitions between these quotes. The paper flows, it drags you in and you cant stop reading.
I feel like this paper is very effective. I am not the biggest fan of immigration and "illegal aliens" but this was still a very interesting article to me. With his using quotes and other outside sources he brings a great balance of rhetoric to his argument. The quoted articles bring logic to his paper. They also make him more credible because he is quoting credible sources. These articles also bring the power of Pathos to his article. The quotes are very emotion grabbing and make you feel what "illegal aliens" feel. Overall this was a very persuasive article.
Wednesday, September 19, 2012
5 Sentence Corrections
1. The most common examples are when a penalty is given.
Correction: The most common example is when a penalty is given.
Rule/Reason: There is only one example so there was a wrong tense used.
2. My opinion is scared
Correction: My opinion is scarred
Rule/Reason: The wrong spelling meant something completely different
3. The BYU mens basketball team have a 7.93 winning percentage in the marriott center that has been created over 40 years.
Correction: The BYU men's basketball team has a 79.3 winning percentage in the Marriott Center, which has been built over the last 40 years.
Rule/ Reason: There are a lot of problems with this sentence. First mens needed a ' because it is an ownership. Then i placed the decimal place wrong which makes their teams percentage go from an awful 7.93% to an amazing 79.3%. Marriott Center needs to be capitalized because it is a proper noun/ it is a name of a place. The last part was really wordy so i changed it to be less confusing.
4. This is because the fan section keeps the players positive and keeps the energy up.
Correction: This is because the fan section keeps the players positive and the energy up.
Rule/ Reason: The word keep does not need to go in front of each section. Only one is needed.
5. If you want to have others, yourself, and the team to have a more enjoyable time, don't be derogatory.
Correction: If you want a more enjoyable experience for yourself, others, and the team-- don't make derogatory comments.
Rules/ Reason: the first sentence was really wordy and confusing, someone cant be derogatory, they can only make derogatory comments.
Correction: The most common example is when a penalty is given.
Rule/Reason: There is only one example so there was a wrong tense used.
2. My opinion is scared
Correction: My opinion is scarred
Rule/Reason: The wrong spelling meant something completely different
3. The BYU mens basketball team have a 7.93 winning percentage in the marriott center that has been created over 40 years.
Correction: The BYU men's basketball team has a 79.3 winning percentage in the Marriott Center, which has been built over the last 40 years.
Rule/ Reason: There are a lot of problems with this sentence. First mens needed a ' because it is an ownership. Then i placed the decimal place wrong which makes their teams percentage go from an awful 7.93% to an amazing 79.3%. Marriott Center needs to be capitalized because it is a proper noun/ it is a name of a place. The last part was really wordy so i changed it to be less confusing.
4. This is because the fan section keeps the players positive and keeps the energy up.
Correction: This is because the fan section keeps the players positive and the energy up.
Rule/ Reason: The word keep does not need to go in front of each section. Only one is needed.
5. If you want to have others, yourself, and the team to have a more enjoyable time, don't be derogatory.
Correction: If you want a more enjoyable experience for yourself, others, and the team-- don't make derogatory comments.
Rules/ Reason: the first sentence was really wordy and confusing, someone cant be derogatory, they can only make derogatory comments.
Monday, September 10, 2012
AL's OP ED
Logos
1. make more organized
2. make it flow
3. connect the sentences
Ethos
1. Include facts so i can become more credible
2. make it slightly more formal to make it more credible
3. support Uchtdorf's more because he is a credible source
Pathos
1. make it more funny
2. have people be moved
3. recreate feelings from football games
Mr. Collins use of Logos/Ethos/Pathos
When Mr. Collins proposes to Elizabeth he does a very poor job of presenting his argument. But he does indeed include all of the necessary aspects of making a good argument. Those aspects are logos/logic, ethos/credibility, and pathos/emotion.
Mr. Collins' best use of the rhetorical proofs is definitely logos. He has some very logical arguments. The first thing he says is that it is the "right thing for every clergyman to set the example of matrimony in his parish". This means that it is his duty to marry because of his job. The second aspect of logic that he uses is that he is going to inherit all estate after her father dies. He is going to get all of the family land and money when there father dies and she has sisters and her mom to provide for, so logically it makes sense to marry the guy that will receive all the money to help her family. The last logos reason he uses is that there will probably never be another offer of marriage to elizabeth. So logically she should marry while she has the chance.
The next thing Mr. Collins attempts to use is ethos or credibility. The first thing he tries to establish himself by is the recommendation of marriage by lady Catherine de Bourgh. By this almost royal person he tries to establish himself as a credible person. The next thing he uses to establish credibility is the charity card. He reminds her that her family has very little money but he lets her know that he would never bring that up once they were married. The final example of ethos is he really wants to pick a daughter in her family. This brings credibility because he wants to help the family and he ties in the personal aspect of her family which is a credible source.
Lastly he uses pathos, this is by far the funniest of all the ways he tries to convince elizabeth to marry him. First he says "it will add greatly to my happiness". So he uses his happiness as an argument with pathos. Second he expresses "in the most animated language, of the violence of (his) affection". So he tries to emotionally appeal to her by telling her how much he cares about her. As a last resort to not lose her he compliments her and says "you are uniformly charming" so again he tries to emotionally appeal to her by complimenting her.
Mr. Collins' best use of the rhetorical proofs is definitely logos. He has some very logical arguments. The first thing he says is that it is the "right thing for every clergyman to set the example of matrimony in his parish". This means that it is his duty to marry because of his job. The second aspect of logic that he uses is that he is going to inherit all estate after her father dies. He is going to get all of the family land and money when there father dies and she has sisters and her mom to provide for, so logically it makes sense to marry the guy that will receive all the money to help her family. The last logos reason he uses is that there will probably never be another offer of marriage to elizabeth. So logically she should marry while she has the chance.
The next thing Mr. Collins attempts to use is ethos or credibility. The first thing he tries to establish himself by is the recommendation of marriage by lady Catherine de Bourgh. By this almost royal person he tries to establish himself as a credible person. The next thing he uses to establish credibility is the charity card. He reminds her that her family has very little money but he lets her know that he would never bring that up once they were married. The final example of ethos is he really wants to pick a daughter in her family. This brings credibility because he wants to help the family and he ties in the personal aspect of her family which is a credible source.
Lastly he uses pathos, this is by far the funniest of all the ways he tries to convince elizabeth to marry him. First he says "it will add greatly to my happiness". So he uses his happiness as an argument with pathos. Second he expresses "in the most animated language, of the violence of (his) affection". So he tries to emotionally appeal to her by telling her how much he cares about her. As a last resort to not lose her he compliments her and says "you are uniformly charming" so again he tries to emotionally appeal to her by complimenting her.
Monday, September 3, 2012
A Panel of 64,045 Judges (Op Ed Proposal)
With the start of BYU comes school comes the start of football season, which also comes with 64,045 fans packing into Lavell Edwards Stadium. Many of these fans believe that they are all knowing about football and frequently express their knowledge while yelling at the refs, players, and coaches. In other words fans tend to correct anything they feel went wrong in the game by screaming it down to the field. The most common example is when a penalty is given, of course BYU football players never do anything wrong so why are the refs calling a penalty. Ok, we all know that is not true, all athletes no matter how good, makes mistakes, but we as fans do not need to be judges, this is not gymnastics people.
This topic is relevant because I believe this "panel of judges" tears away from the true spirit of football. To address this issue now could make this season more successful, and much more enjoyable.
My opinion has three main supports. One it is respectful to the people around you to stay positive and help others enjoy the game. Two, as BYU students or Alumni we believe in loving our neighbors and judging righteously. By yell rude things even if everyone else does it, it is not right. Third, being a successful athlete is a very big part mental. By having positive vibes coming from the fans helps athletes have more confidence and do better.
The assumptions i am making is that everyone that reads "The Universe" has been to a BYU game or has experienced fans while watching a game on T.V. with lots of rowdy people.
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